SkyPilot
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Asshat - SkunkWorks Division
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Post by SkyPilot on Mar 1, 2014 20:59:12 GMT -5
Puma. Firstly a suggestion to writing a better focused paper. Don't attempt to cover a broad spectrum (national / international), stick to one topic - this case SB199. Cover what the bill would do, how it would effect the sport of airsoft, and then cover how it will effect the California businesses that are effected by the bill. Within the business, cover how it effects local sales within California and how it would effect out-of-state sales; given the majority of the sales by the retailers are out-side California.
Your paper needs to be unbiased towards the sport and stick to the facts. That said, very little factual information can be obtained from a web forum. Data you should gather is by interviewing the California retailers; ask them how much of their overall business is out-of-state? However I fear these companies will not disclose that type of financial data. Making your paper lack incomplete and unsustainable information, and there for a paper based on rumors or your belief.
All this will setup you up for failure in writing your paper and I imagine will result in nothing better than a grade letter C; regardless of your writing format or grammar. Best to stick to a topic that can deliver factual information, such as Apophis and how close this asteroid will come to Earth. And finish with a cliff hanger on how it may impact Earth in 2036.
Just my two cents.
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Post by Puma1 on Mar 1, 2014 21:44:14 GMT -5
I appreciate the input. On second thought I probably will change topics. Thanks.
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