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Post by Viking on Oct 30, 2001 8:50:21 GMT -5
Here is a article I wrote up long ago for Airsoft Retreat when I was the big cheese over there. Its now on my website at members.aol.com/armalite82/airsoft let me know what you think and if all the images work. Also, Hadoken if it meets you expectations feel free to copy and paste for an article on MiA.
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Post by Newman on Oct 30, 2001 13:51:13 GMT -5
Reads well, Viking, and the pictures really help. You do need to correct a lot (see grammatical error right there) of errors in grammar, though. Sorry, I'm really picky 'cause I'm in Honors English ;D The most common thing I noticed was that you used 'it's' when you meant 'its'. Use 'its' when you refer to a certain something having an object, like "its head" means that it owns the head. If you said "it's head", you'd be saying "it is head". Remember, it's is a contraction of 'it' and 'is', and 'its' is showing ownership. Also, your first sentence just has a tiny error-you wrote "where" when you meant "were". Hehehe...great writing, just fix those mistakes Viking
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Post by Unnamed on Oct 30, 2001 14:33:09 GMT -5
man newman went a little overboard on the grammer stuff there. I have seen much worse by airsofters. course, I have also seen much better by people who I know who live in Israel... The page is down, I couldnt get to see it
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Post by Newman on Oct 30, 2001 15:28:07 GMT -5
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Post by Locutus on Oct 30, 2001 16:25:05 GMT -5
This coming from the guy who just said "silentest" on airsoftplayers.com?? lmao.
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Post by Newman on Oct 30, 2001 16:54:01 GMT -5
I make up words... ;D Bet you never heard of funkychelic, eh? Actually, I tried editing that post before you wrote that...and there's no edit button.
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Post by Minky on Oct 30, 2001 17:36:41 GMT -5
HAHA, Beans got owned.
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Post by Newman on Oct 30, 2001 17:46:32 GMT -5
You weren't there on Sunday...were you... ;D Anyhoo, I'm shutting up about defending myself from now on. I wrote "silentest" on accident, boohoo, Newman the 14 year-old got owned...
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